because while some truths lend themselves to equations, others are best described in verse

Awen’s footprint

i am a blade of grass
bent into muddied waters;
i am gravel displaced
by the pressure of loss;
i am glass become sand
become glass again:
the injunction of a clear singer,
the wisdom of the sea.

…..

Follow me uphill;
roll aside
the Sarsen stone set
over my
soul, unearthing
the well of stale
passion that
expires breath-
wise under damp
breasts and dry heat.
Find me a new
shrine to an old
desperation buried in clouds
of molded hope, somewhere
deep and high where i
can claw out and
lay down with pride
the four bloodied
chambers of this broken
faith.

46 responses

  1. another winner…

    come join us again, love your company…
    Happy Thursday!

    September 9, 2010 at 2:04 am

  2. love the first stanza,
    beautiful images….

    I used to sing a song called grass,

    extraordinary meanings could be discovered in ordinary subjects.

    stunning poem!

    September 9, 2010 at 2:05 am

  3. Wow.. amazing imagery throughout!!
    From rise to fall, back to rise…
    From hopelessness to hope
    From darkness to faint glimmer…
    All very nicely done!! Really enjoyed the style and structure!!

    September 9, 2010 at 3:02 am

  4. Loved every word and they layout rocks girlfriend xxx

    September 9, 2010 at 4:45 am

  5. this is beautiful. thanks for sharing.

    September 9, 2010 at 8:47 am

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  7. Beautiful, at points haunting like the picture.

    Peace,

    September 9, 2010 at 9:51 am

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  9. Wow, your description of the heart is just stunning!! Great flow of words!
    Love it! Good luck!
    Rachana.

    September 9, 2010 at 10:44 am

  10. Brilliant piece of writing, Some people on here manage to play with their words in such a way that I could never imagine, and you are one of them. Thank you for being here kx

    http://kashaw.wordpress.com/2010/08/27/casino-jinks/

    September 9, 2010 at 1:25 pm

  11. pessimism to optimism.. your wordplay just astounds! :) well said..!

    mine for the rally is ~here~

    September 9, 2010 at 1:57 pm

  12. Inelle Zshayra

    Sweet.
    Beautifully written! Thanks for sharing this to all of us…

    September 9, 2010 at 5:01 pm

  13. Happy Thursday,
    Hope that you do find time visiting… :)

    September 9, 2010 at 6:22 pm

    • @6:39–done! actually 20+; couldn’t help myself. :) Thanks Jingle!

      September 9, 2010 at 6:39 pm

  14. “Find me a new
    shrine to an old
    desperation buried in clouds
    of molded hope, somewhere
    deep and high where i
    can claw out and
    lay down with pride
    the four bloodied
    chambers of this broken
    faith. ”

    I could ponder this for days:thank you

    September 9, 2010 at 8:04 pm

  15. loved this! i liked your phrase choices, thanks for sharing :)

    September 9, 2010 at 8:05 pm

  16. Speechless, this is so wonderful. What a great job!

    September 9, 2010 at 8:29 pm

  17. Wow…your words sing…beautiful piece!

    September 9, 2010 at 9:12 pm

  18. Jingle, Kavita, Buttercup–always enjoy the pleasure of one of your visits! Glad y’all like the style/layout with the “preface” beforehand–I wasn’t sure about it myself at first, but it seemed to fit the mood. Modeled on the “song of Taliesin” in Celtic lore, for those into that sort of thing…

    southernmusings–always a pleasure. :)

    notjeffery–thanks. took me a long time to find a suitable picture for this one. glad you found some resonance in it.

    Heart–I’m so happy you liked the namesake description! You have no idea how long in my head i went ’round with the phrase “the four bloodied/chambers of this broken/–blank–” to keep the idea of “heart” without saying it…

    continued…. :)
    jsl

    September 9, 2010 at 9:42 pm

  19. Katherine–stop it; you’re making me blush! was checking out some of your stuff & found my way to “Cats”; did a little grrr-ing myself. :)

    Leo, Inelle, wondrin, thoughts–appreciate you stopping by, and all your kind words.

    woih–i find that’s one of the most beautiful things about reading (and writing) poetry: how it always gives you some new thought or perspective to ponder. it was my pleasure to share.

    dasuntoucha–singing was a big part of this piece–at least in the sense of singing the way the old druids did. :) glad the words did for you.

    cheers all and happy rally!
    jsl

    September 9, 2010 at 9:50 pm

  20. Someone Is Special

    What a transition.. I loved your first para a lot..

    Happy Rally…

    Sweet Dish

    –Someone Is Special–

    September 9, 2010 at 10:52 pm

  21. I adore this.
    So rich.
    So vivid.

    September 9, 2010 at 10:54 pm

  22. Rätsel Ewig

    Breathtaking.

    September 10, 2010 at 12:03 am

  23. nice one
    glad to visit your page again
    i tagged you

    http://makeachange1.wordpress.com/2010/09/10/band-wagon-tag-and-three-things-tag-plus-an-award/

    September 10, 2010 at 12:16 am

  24. Fascinating read, i enjoyed it. Found it quite moving.

    September 10, 2010 at 4:07 am

  25. thanks for dropping in, Someone :)

    Madison, Ratsel–appreciate your thoughts, and glad you liked it.

    Anky– always a pleasure to hear from you. sorry to say i won’t be joining in your game of tag. thanks for thinking of me, tho.

    Jessica– thanks. glad you enjoyed.

    cheers all,
    jsl

    September 10, 2010 at 10:27 am

  26. Wonderful diction with very unique imageries.. great work, Siubhan :)

    September 11, 2010 at 3:32 am

  27. lay down the pride …. great
    cheers!!!

    http://wiserskydiver.wordpress.com/2010/09/11/iam-not-afraid/

    http://wiserskydiver.wordpress.com/2010/09/09/words-are-defined/

    my rally entries :D have fun

    September 11, 2010 at 3:27 pm

  28. Powerful poem. “damp breasts and dry heat” … Wow! Just amazing imagery. I can read it again and again, and keep getting more each time. The close is quite powerful.

    September 11, 2010 at 5:57 pm

  29. wow…beautiful imagery…

    September 12, 2010 at 3:05 am

  30. Happy Sunday….

    Please let me know after you are done visiting ,
    either returning favors or completed 18 New…
    Thanks for the attention!

    September 12, 2010 at 9:17 am

    • been done since thurs. sent you a comment but guess it got lost in the ether. cheers.
      jsl

      September 12, 2010 at 12:24 pm

  31. imagina–thanks for dropping by! love your new gravatar, a beautiful image :)

    christine–you’re too kind. i like the close best myself.

    skydiver, Alethea– thanks for stopping by and for the kind words; will check you out soon!

    September 12, 2010 at 12:28 pm

  32. wonderful throughout!

    by the pressure of loss;
    i am glass become sand
    become glass again:

    loved that imagery!

    come check out my rally post if you feel the deire!

    http://lifeloveandmisery.wordpress.com/2010/09/12/collapse/

    September 12, 2010 at 7:51 pm

  33. What a talent you are!

    September 12, 2010 at 8:56 pm

  34. kyoichi

    wrote something that goes like this before but this one’s much nicer.

    got me all nostalgic =]

    September 13, 2010 at 8:14 am

  35. thanks, dc–glad you liked it. been over to visit your place & was equally impressed. :)

    tasi–you are too kind! happy you found your way over here :)

    kyoichi–would like to read your own work some time for myself & compare! do you have a site?

    cheers all
    jsl

    September 13, 2010 at 10:11 am

  36. Hello! I wanted to pass these awards on to you:

    http://wp.me/pZXMF-bQ

    September 13, 2010 at 8:04 pm

    • thanks so much. put a link back to you over in “awards, etc” for your kindness.

      peace
      jsl

      September 14, 2010 at 11:30 am

  37. A marvellous display of construction Joanna, and always a pleasure to read.

    September 14, 2010 at 7:57 am

  38. You chose your words well in this poem and did beautifully

    September 15, 2010 at 4:27 am

  39. thanks shane, Arts; always lovely to hear from you.

    jsl

    September 15, 2010 at 9:23 am

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  41. Rich imagery of Gaia Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem. Hope your week goes well.

    September 15, 2010 at 5:17 pm

  42. The flow, the images…the story…it’s so beautifullly expressed. Lovely lovely poem.

    September 15, 2010 at 7:50 pm

  43. john– thanks for stopping by. enjoyed very much your potluck link.

    Talon– thanks so much. your words are too kind.

    jsl

    September 16, 2010 at 10:32 pm

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