penitent
he walks backward
down a philosopher’s path
racing threat of rain
with the unmeasured cadence
of his breath, burying
regret deep
with each unhurried
footfall, denying every silvered
drop
the treachery tattooed
on his soul.
You can read about the author’s own journey on the literal Philosopher’s Path here. 🙂
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Great picture 🙂
August 26, 2010 at 8:10 am
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profound piece,
very skilfully done!
🙂
Glad to have you in!
August 26, 2010 at 9:15 am
It is right on time,
Thanks for playing….
scanning participants list to visit FRESH ones first, so that you get more feedback on your work…
Happy Thursday!
August 26, 2010 at 9:17 am
thanks for counting me in, Jingle. 18+ done and still counting. always a pleasure. 🙂
jsl
August 26, 2010 at 3:47 pm
Such a cute and small poem, I loved it, down a philosopher path, awesome..
Do stop by Sweetened Waters
–Someone Is Special–
August 26, 2010 at 9:26 am
I get the feeling of running from forgiveness almost. Love the poem.
Raven
August 26, 2010 at 1:27 pm
very profound idea indeed.. good poem here! 🙂
August 26, 2010 at 1:32 pm
You conveyed so much in such a short span, wonderfully done!
August 26, 2010 at 2:28 pm
I really like your work.
August 26, 2010 at 2:53 pm
totally loved it!!!
August 26, 2010 at 3:34 pm
thanks for stopping by Lindea, Leo.
Jingle: always a pleasure.
WEM, you’re welcome back any time!
I like your take, Raven; hadn’t thought of it quite like that. Thanks.
Liliana, thoughtsnotlost, glad you liked it 🙂
will be by your sweetened waters soon, Someone…
🙂 cheers all!
jsl
August 26, 2010 at 4:16 pm
This is a strong piece! And the picture enhances it. What wonderful imagery!
August 26, 2010 at 5:56 pm
awesome, love your word choices here…esp “with the unmeasured cadence of his breath”
just…wow!
August 26, 2010 at 6:29 pm
very nice wording
August 26, 2010 at 6:34 pm
Deep words my friend…loved the last line so much. Hugs x
August 26, 2010 at 9:38 pm
Pretty deep.. Loved the small piece that carries a deep essence.. Lovely..
August 27, 2010 at 3:49 am
An interesting image of a penitent. I like how you keep the alliteration throughout the poem. I liked the image of racing with unmeasured cadence. That image stood out and sort of gave the image of intent. Glad to have dropped by this poem.
August 27, 2010 at 9:54 am
This is great.
I really do like your poetry
August 27, 2010 at 8:44 pm
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/08/27/friendship-means-a-world-2-me/
pick three awards from my post,
pass them to 1 to 10 blogging friends with whom you believe that they deserve them.
have fun!
Take good care.
August 27, 2010 at 8:46 pm
@Christine–glad you liked the pic; it was actually the inspiration for the piece itself 🙂
@buttercup–hugs back at ya babe!
wondrinsoul, Olivia, Jessica: you are too kind. thanks for stopping.
October–glad you dropped by, too. alliteration is one of my favorite tricks.
webshow–I never know how to address you: as “Arts,” as “webshow,” as an actual name… sorry. anyway, it’s always nice to hear from you.
and Jingle, thanks again. for everything.
August 27, 2010 at 9:19 pm
powerful! a terrific read!
August 28, 2010 at 12:04 am
Aahh.. the woes of regret…so haunting!
Could see the pain in the words, Siubhan… quite a chilling read.. but very beautiful and deep..
August 28, 2010 at 3:42 am
well matched photo and poem 🙂
August 28, 2010 at 6:55 am
Have a great day, a wish for you:
August 28, 2010 at 11:50 am
Beautiful photography and imagery. Powerful poem.
Victoria
August 28, 2010 at 5:47 pm
i won’t deny that this poem is one of my favorite,,
😀
August 29, 2010 at 7:11 am
A very moving piece of poetry, Thank you for sharing x
http://kashaw.wordpress.com/2010/08/21/the-northern-lights/
August 29, 2010 at 9:32 am
thanks oinky, Victoria, Katherine. appreciate your dropping by.
likewise enreal; oh and btw cool gravatar 🙂
Kavita, my friend, always a pleasure.
DarkJasmine; I’m honored.
and also for your link, thoughtsnotlost; will get to pasting and posting and nominating when I’m back at home later this evening–you are too kind! 🙂
August 29, 2010 at 11:50 am
beautiful…. lovely choice of words… says a a lot.
keep versing 🙂
you might wanna visit
http://makeachange1.wordpress.com/2010/08/27/another-love-story/
viva la vida 🙂
August 29, 2010 at 6:44 pm
very deep and powerful!!! Simply awesome…
August 30, 2010 at 2:07 am
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I’ve left you a couple of awards. That poem still haunts me.
http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2010/09/03/blogger-awards/
September 3, 2010 at 5:01 pm
Anky–thanks for stopping by; I’m off to visit your latest very soon!
Alethea–glad you enjoyed.
liv2write–I’m honored. it takes me always a little while to respond to award postings, but I’ll get there. Thanks again.
September 4, 2010 at 7:06 pm
Very powerful poem…really enjoyed the photo that you paired with it.
September 5, 2010 at 5:23 pm
thanks slp; it was more like pairing the poem with the photo 🙂
September 9, 2010 at 7:25 am
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A beautiful blog and thank you so much for visiting my humble space. A lot of power and philosophical ponderous in this piece, the title certainly befits the idea and creativity.
September 23, 2010 at 5:09 pm
thank you so much, Epiphanies, for your kind words and for stopping by. i also enjoyed your “humble space” very much!
September 23, 2010 at 6:09 pm
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/awards-from-the-blogging-universe/sweet-princess-award-4-female-community-members/#comment-18296
awards for you.
September 28, 2010 at 1:40 pm
thanks Jingle! 🙂
September 28, 2010 at 2:47 pm