footprints sunk in swift mud,
tire treads of a season
shedding loneliness like
unneeded garments by an
open door, shameless
and dripping and pre-
unleashed with the
ferocity of tightly strung
suddenly set free from
a shapely neck,
to a ne’er-do-well of a wind
beside a skirt
puddled brashly on
from the nascent breeze,
17 thoughts on “thaw”
How erotic and sensual the gifts of spring you give! I’m always delighted to come knocking at your door for visit here 😉
Monty / bummy
Monty, thanks for stopping by; the pleasure’s all mine 🙂
Wow, sheer beauty mingles with the sensual!
I’m glad to hear you say that–it’s exactly what I was going for! 🙂
i need a shower…and i think the pearls might have rolled into the closet…if you are looking for them…
lol, brian. don’t exaggerate! 😉
Fierce and revealing. Hints of frenzy amid snapped pearl necklaces and flower openings. Judging by the comments, I’d say you achieved your artistic intent. The short lines, especially the ones with just one word, are very effective.
earthy and sensual… very nice!
Very effective use of words to bring create strong imagery and feelings with minimal words.
I love the image of the taut necklace exploding from a shapely neck to seed and braise the earth’s skin with the gooseflesh of Spring.
My goodness what a wordsmith you are, Joanna.
Also, thanks for coming to my site to read my verbose poem about writer’s block. I think I fooled some folks there.
As we turn away from winter it is as if we discover senses we’d lost.
Excellent poem siubhan
Woww.. LOVED the raw feel to this one, Siubhan… the wordplay was really awesome! Made it all too visual… like a scene playing in my mind.. TOO GOOD!!!
I loved the feeling this invoked. It has a wonderful draw and pull to it. It’s a great write.
Thanks, everyone, for reading and for your kind comments– you all are the best!
Tiger– You are too kind! And it was my pleasure to visit.
Richard, exactly. Like awakening after a hibernation…
Kavita– “too good”? lol. 🙂 hugs, my friend.
Apryl– “earthy” and “sensual”–just how I would describe it myself. 🙂
dustus– your comments always feel a little like a professional critique. Thanks so much.
Carl, Fool– ‘preciate it.
A fine, fine, let-er-rip spring poem. I love the abandonment of it, careless and free after so much girdled sequestering. A naked romp, which is exactly what spring is. – Brendan
rightly said, Brendan! 🙂
Ah!!! Sensuous with meanings that can be attributed to a lot of things other than the desires that it arises within the heart to feel, see and touch….
I enjoyed the feeling of it all attached to the season too…
Loved your words…
‘shedding loneliness like
unneeded garments by an
open door, shameless’
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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