footprints sunk in swift mud,
tire treads of a season
shedding loneliness like
unneeded garments by an
open door, shameless
and dripping and pre-
possessed. Beauty
unleashed with the
ferocity of tightly strung
suddenly set free from
a shapely neck,
tossed violently
to a ne’er-do-well of a wind
beside a skirt
puddled brashly on
cold stone.
with gooseflesh
from the nascent breeze,
her secret

17 thoughts on “thaw

  1. Fierce and revealing. Hints of frenzy amid snapped pearl necklaces and flower openings. Judging by the comments, I’d say you achieved your artistic intent. The short lines, especially the ones with just one word, are very effective.

  2. I love the image of the taut necklace exploding from a shapely neck to seed and braise the earth’s skin with the gooseflesh of Spring.

    My goodness what a wordsmith you are, Joanna.

    Also, thanks for coming to my site to read my verbose poem about writer’s block. I think I fooled some folks there.

    OneLove–Tiger Windwalker

  3. Woww.. LOVED the raw feel to this one, Siubhan… the wordplay was really awesome! Made it all too visual… like a scene playing in my mind.. TOO GOOD!!!

  4. Thanks, everyone, for reading and for your kind comments– you all are the best!

    Tiger– You are too kind! And it was my pleasure to visit.

    Richard, exactly. Like awakening after a hibernation…

    Kavita– “too good”? lol. 🙂 hugs, my friend.

    Apryl– “earthy” and “sensual”–just how I would describe it myself. 🙂

    dustus– your comments always feel a little like a professional critique. Thanks so much.

    Carl, Fool– ‘preciate it.


  5. A fine, fine, let-er-rip spring poem. I love the abandonment of it, careless and free after so much girdled sequestering. A naked romp, which is exactly what spring is. – Brendan

  6. Ah!!! Sensuous with meanings that can be attributed to a lot of things other than the desires that it arises within the heart to feel, see and touch….
    I enjoyed the feeling of it all attached to the season too…
    Loved your words…
    ‘shedding loneliness like
    unneeded garments by an
    open door, shameless’

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    At Twitter @VerseEveryDay


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