because while some truths lend themselves to equations, others are best described in verse

a beginning sort of day

crawled out of this morning;
i was blowing the dead leaves
from its still downy hair
when two new twinned
lives grinning arrived
in the backseat of
Somebody’s dreamcatcher
and with fingers like
examined every
strand of me; i carried them
like pistols on each hip,
aimed at the world and all
the cries of its

14 responses

  1. dustus

    The visual and sound references work extremely well, along with a collective tactile sense when from the actions. Not a wasted word with a regenerative feel and theme; fitting for spring.

    April 5, 2011 at 5:49 pm

  2. ha. this was wicked…fingers like microsopes to wonder becoming pistols of renewal…i like, alot…

    April 5, 2011 at 7:23 pm

  3. I love the feeling from this. wonderful poem!

    April 5, 2011 at 11:26 pm

  4. excellent word usage and visuals…great share…cheers pete

    April 6, 2011 at 2:15 pm

  5. The backseat of somebody’s dreamcatcher — now THAT is some good poetry indeed!


    April 6, 2011 at 3:22 pm

  6. You paint a very detailed picture with language that begs to be heard. Nice.

    April 6, 2011 at 4:44 pm

  7. Forgive me all for the late response to your kind comments– poem-a-day work plus wedding this weekend plus multiple reading events this month makes me a little behind– and a little crazy.

    Dustus, “regenerative” was definitely what I was going for. Thanks.

    pete, Carl– always a pleasure. Appreciate your kind words.

    brian, “wicked”– nice. thanks. 🙂

    Jannie– wow, glad you liked it– I definitely agonized over that line in particular 🙂

    M.A.S., painting with words– it’s what we do, right? 😉 Thanks for stopping by.

    *off to write some more*
    Happy April everybody!


    April 8, 2011 at 7:54 am

  8. Susanna, i read this the day you posted it … still intrigued by “the backseat of
    Somebody’s dreamcatcher”, especially the cap’ed S … i suppose, a perfect place for two new twinned lives … *grin*

    as always, slightly obscure yet fully accessible language and now a familiar voice … beautiful seasonal imagery, yes.

    i hope spring finds you well …


    April 9, 2011 at 6:01 pm

  9. oh, i forgot to say “loved the title!!!” …

    April 9, 2011 at 6:02 pm

    • noxy,

      thanks for dropping by, and the sentiments. glad you were intrigued! always a pleasure to hear from you.


      April 10, 2011 at 11:04 pm

  10. Make those pistols work, i noticed they were a bit snobby to you at first. lol
    Great poem Siubhan

    April 11, 2011 at 9:07 am

    • lol not snobby exactly, just… anxiety-inducing… 😉 Thanks, Richard.

      April 12, 2011 at 5:56 pm

  11. Catherine

    Wonderful. I love it. Skillful and emotive. I especially am impressed by the way you graft together literal and figurative meanings in a single turn of phrase. You are very good at this.

    April 20, 2011 at 8:47 pm

    • cheers. i’m very glad you liked it. not sure if it’s the stuff of baby books, but… …well, i’m just glad you liked it. 🙂

      April 20, 2011 at 10:21 pm


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