because while some truths lend themselves to equations, others are best described in verse

She

 

wears
eternity tattooed
on her wrists
to hide the fractalled
mysteries of vein
and luminous
fragility, tracts
of yesterdays
that slide
beneath
tomorrow’s surfaces
like subway tunnels.

She knows
secrets:

when to
dance, where
to run,
how to
fly but
she
won’t tell,
ever;
keeps her smile
wrapped up tight
in shadow and
in truth

she
looks best illumined
by rooftop neons,
mirrorless and
deepening;
her eyes
change color
in the sun
about to
set,
the heart
about
to jump.

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27 responses

  1. I can see her. This is Miami. She has many sisters. Very sadly too many. She has no smile and her truth is brutal.

    June 21, 2011 at 3:15 pm

    • Her truth is brutal, that’s for sure. Thanks, Carl.

      June 22, 2011 at 3:19 pm

  2. Beautiful! I love the image of “eternity tattooed on her wrists.” Had me going in so many directions.

    June 21, 2011 at 3:17 pm

    • Thanks, Denise! I like that it can take you so many directions (though, as is often the case, the inspiration came from something more literal than you might imagine…) 😉

      June 22, 2011 at 3:03 pm

  3. Cassiopeia Rises

    This is both powerful and melodic. Great images that have a true meaning. Well done.

    Melanie

    June 21, 2011 at 4:29 pm

    • Thanks for stopping by, Melanie. Glad you liked it. Love the “cassiopeia rises,” by the way 🙂

      June 22, 2011 at 3:05 pm

  4. expatinCAT

    ‘her eyes change color in the sun about to set’…some lovely lines. Powerful imagery and perfectly paced – as usual! 🙂 // Peter.

    June 21, 2011 at 5:20 pm

    • Peter, you’re making me blush! 😉 Thanks, as always!

      June 22, 2011 at 3:06 pm

  5. Great imagery … We can all wonder and guess how she looks.. but you made us see her soul.

    June 21, 2011 at 6:46 pm

  6. oh i want to learn her secrets but know i can only appreciate her from afar….really well penned…

    June 21, 2011 at 6:58 pm

  7. You give us a detailed look at the workings, inner and outer, of one who has experienced far more than she should have in too few years.

    June 21, 2011 at 7:40 pm

  8. dustus

    Very telling (showing too) in the way time is divided. Eternity on her wrists along with yesterday marked, with past getting under the skin of the future. Really cool how you compose that it in various line lengths that do not exceed 4 words! Seeing the sunset change in her eyes before that final “leap” produces a lovely effect.

    June 21, 2011 at 8:06 pm

    • Thanks, Adam. I hadn’t thought consciously about the line lengths–they just kind of came out that way– jagged and short. 🙂 Always appreciate your thoughts and kind words.

      June 22, 2011 at 3:15 pm

  9. She sounds simply captivating…

    June 21, 2011 at 8:24 pm

  10. Powerful poem…love this: “keeps her smile
    wrapped up tight
    in shadow and
    in truth”

    gorgeous and so, so sorrowful.

    June 21, 2011 at 8:37 pm

  11. A great voice here. The tension at the end before the leap is perfect.

    June 21, 2011 at 11:24 pm

  12. whoever she is, the poem describes her in a way I personally wanted to adopt something from her.
    The secrets- when to dance and where to run, the smile wrapped in shadows and truth/ that’s appealing/,
    the eyes changing colors with the set of the sun … she is lucky to have you write about …

    June 22, 2011 at 6:15 am

  13. Beautiful piece! She is a wonderful person.

    June 22, 2011 at 7:27 am

    • Thanks, Carl; about her– not sure that I agree, but I hope so!

      June 22, 2011 at 3:18 pm

  14. Really descriptive in showing her from afar, very nice peice.

    June 22, 2011 at 8:04 am

  15. this:

    “she wears
    eternity tattooed
    on her wrists
    to hide the fractalled
    mysteries of vein
    and luminous
    fragility,”

    and this:

    “her eyes
    change color
    in the sun
    about to
    set,
    the heart
    about
    to jump.”

    wow. you paint a vivid and heartrending picture with your words…

    June 22, 2011 at 9:52 am

    • wow, thanks, Leslie. always appreciate your thoughtful take. cheers.

      June 22, 2011 at 3:13 pm

  16. My my my!!! The brilliance of your imagery makes wanna wear shades, Siubhan! It’s fantastic! Vivid and luminous!

    June 22, 2011 at 3:58 pm

  17. One of my favorites of the day. Bravo.
    Kelly
    http://simplydeeppoetry.blogspot.com

    June 22, 2011 at 7:38 pm

  18. Whoever or whatever she is, she sounds very special

    June 29, 2011 at 6:46 pm

  19. Beautifully written!

    July 11, 2011 at 6:59 pm

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