present tense

unprogram yester-
day, its yellowed heavy
footprints. reset, re-
breathe
the borrowed air
he gave you in fistfuls
until sighing it drips
purified by sleepy gasps
of oblivion.

there
never was a forever; gold
greened with a patina
of rust-encrusted openings,
tetanus in a tumbler
that
you needn’t
carry with you
though the weight
pounds systolically
after your shadow
like a one-legged man
left behind
at the bus stop: lub-dub,
lub-dub, crutches
on hot cement, a coronary
noose you’ve
slipped up and over,
unknotted
to land
on two feet, square.

you needn’t carry it with you,
the whiplashed flagellation of
if only,

up the slopes of
tomorrow’s mornings
and into your first
real today
in years.

22 thoughts on “present tense

  1. Oh, I like this very much πŸ™‚ Especially, “you needn’t carry it with you, the whiplashed flagellation of if only,” What a fantastic way to say it!

  2. This is really good. But you knew that. Still, I can’t help telling you this is extremely effective and original on a subject that is rarely addressed in a truly original way. Fine writing.

  3. This is absolutely beautiful. I could read poetry like this forever. Every turn, every line feels like a new learning event. It is a very creative way of exploring a concept that has been hashed over quite a bit. It is a beautiful way of exploring the concept. Lots of good colors! Loved it!

  4. breathe
    the borrowed air
    he gave you in fistfuls
    until sighing it drips
    purified by sleepy gasps
    of oblivion.

    there
    never was a forever; gold
    greened with a patina
    of rust-encrusted openings

    This is original in its depiction of the clanging trail of materialized pain we carry with us, preventing us from being fully embodied today. Well done!

  5. AWESOME!! A great message .. conveyed in the most effective and poetic manner!
    This summer, it’s raining memories I believe.. and some are really tough to let go of… ughhh… but somehow, they never really do anything to better one’s future, do they?

    You have expressed this beautifully, Siubhan.. bravo!

  6. Thanks, everyone, for your kind comments. I think this is a record for me in “likes.” πŸ™‚ It was good to write for a change something where, as Broken Sparkles says, “There is hope.” We all need a little of that now and then. πŸ˜‰

    Cheers,
    –jsl

  7. This was great. seems like all the others have taken the words I wanted to say.. so, great it is:-)

    I will be back…( and thank you for your time and words on mine a swell)

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