because while some truths lend themselves to equations, others are best described in verse

Kandahar

Dark clouds march across blue skies
like battle lines drawn in damp cotton.

Below,
a quiet frenzy in other azure
as surgeons sort glass
shards from bleeding veins,
debride the dirt
from twitching muscle and
sew a soldier
together
again.

Someone had sadly forgotten to tell him
the war was winding down.

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21 responses

  1. Anonymous

    Ow, the very word ‘debride’ hurts.

    August 9, 2011 at 3:05 pm

  2. “…to tell him the war was winding down.” Reminded me of protagonist Paul in all Quiet on the Western Front killed on last day of war.

    August 9, 2011 at 3:05 pm

  3. Anonymous

    Also: loved the poem, and the presentation. Thanks for it.

    August 9, 2011 at 3:06 pm

  4. Very nice piece and love the pic!

    August 9, 2011 at 3:12 pm

  5. WoW! So vivid, so sad.

    August 9, 2011 at 3:55 pm

  6. to sew a soldier together again…that line really grabbed me…and then the soft sadness in theline that follows…very nice…

    August 9, 2011 at 4:10 pm

  7. Very nice !

    August 9, 2011 at 5:44 pm

  8. The sin is the war to begin with, and head held high, he allows himself to be sewn together. MY! A potent write that far from relies upon un reachable language, but rather delivers it’s cutting point with simplicity and power. Well wrote, poet!

    August 9, 2011 at 5:49 pm

  9. Feel this one under my skin..

    August 9, 2011 at 5:52 pm

  10. snap…surgeons sort glass shards from bleeding veins and sewing that soldier together again…wasn’t expecting such a poem with the peaceful clouds pic…great how you spun this with a last line that resonates and leaves room for thinking further

    August 9, 2011 at 6:01 pm

  11. Short but great lines specially these:

    “twitching muscle and
    sew a soldier
    together
    again.”

    August 9, 2011 at 8:41 pm

  12. Anonymous

    Sharp as a scalpel. Brilliant write.

    August 9, 2011 at 8:56 pm

  13. Anonymous

    ..who would think that below a peaceful clouds are scenes of chaotic clash… a barbaric world indeed… i like this.. for some reasons i felt familiar with your title though i can’t remember when actually i first read it…hmmmn..

    August 9, 2011 at 8:58 pm

  14. Joanne Elliott aka soulsprite

    I like how your soft words clash with the harsh words about war…effective.

    August 9, 2011 at 10:49 pm

  15. Outstanding poem!

    August 10, 2011 at 3:18 am

  16. My first reaction to this piece was sadness. The second was anger, that while men still fight the innocent are permanently broken, like this poor soldier. There will always be such grief in this world and it breaks a mother’s heart…

    August 10, 2011 at 12:15 pm

  17. Vivid pen to the chaos beneath the quiet clouds. Wonderful write ~ Rose

    August 10, 2011 at 5:38 pm

  18. battle lines drawn in damp cotton – that’s wonderful.

    August 10, 2011 at 6:09 pm

  19. Thanks, all, for your kind comments. I’m usually not one big on political statements but am very happy with this piece and the way it came out. For anyone curious, inspiration came from the following article: http://hamptonroads.com/achanceinhell.

    Peace,
    –jsl

    August 12, 2011 at 9:06 am

  20. I have been angry and have written poetry about these military arrogances for years now. A powerful piece – and if more comes to you, please write it. Your final lines sound nonchalant but say volumes about the waste of humanity…. for what? Thank you so much for writing from the heart. Amy
    Poets United prompt: http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/08/13/three-images-of-women-poets-united-she/

    August 15, 2011 at 12:46 am

  21. In places like Kandahar there will probably always be a war going on, down on the ground or up in the blue skies … and how sad there are always the innocent to suffer from, the soldiers who supposedly went to fight fro their country …

    August 21, 2011 at 2:55 am

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