because while some truths lend themselves to equations, others are best described in verse

molting

barefoot in the snow, pre-sun. icewater-drawn dawn baths & midnight
velvet across a slightly shattered mirror. dreamcatching by hand. from
a hammock by the water, she fig-picks the yellow twilights out of late
August, pulls laughter out of the lake with old cane poles. trawling
for blackberry-stained summer-skins, bartering breadcrumbs for bor-
rowed affection. a peeling front porch in grey reflects moonset on nights
as transparent as mother’s white nightgown (like the one i fished from
the rag box to cloak the scarlet & the steam, that first time). like head-
lights through dark bedroom windows. like January frost on fever.

24 responses

  1. dang this is delicious…chaotic imagery that works together to pain a lovely picture…moonlit thighs, blackberries…some nice touches there…really a lovely piece…

    August 23, 2011 at 11:30 pm

  2. Wonderful piece… love the bundles of fruit filled days, and nights (smiles)… my favorite lines ‘she fig-picks the yellow twilights out of late
    August, pulls laughter out of the lake with old cane poles’.

    August 23, 2011 at 11:39 pm

  3. What a beautifully written piece! There are so many tight phrases that draw us in constantly one feels like one is being serenaded by Mother Nature herself! I love it all.W

    August 24, 2011 at 12:52 am

  4. Evocative and compelling– i love the surprises such as fig-picking the yellow from August– lovely! i’m at http://parolavivace.blogspot.com . xj

    August 24, 2011 at 4:08 am

    • Thanks, jenne. I’m going to make it over to your new meme one of these Fridays… 🙂

      August 25, 2011 at 11:27 am

  5. So many great images described in vivid language – an overdose! Enjoyed this Joanne.

    August 24, 2011 at 6:00 am

  6. A wonderful piece, comes alive with the imagery you convey, nice!

    August 24, 2011 at 7:55 am

  7. I am there, just a blade of grass, dried by autumn, observing this richly penned scene. Fantastic!

    August 24, 2011 at 9:29 am

  8. very nice. the layers, as mentioned.

    August 24, 2011 at 11:07 am

    • ‘preciate it, val.

      August 25, 2011 at 11:31 am

  9. Artful imagery. Even though I am no literary critic(according to the snobs) , I know I am correct in this assessment because it made the film in my mind’s cinema fill the screen up in there wherever. Imagery. The poet’s religion.

    August 24, 2011 at 11:33 am

    • The poet’s religion indeed. You’re critic enough for me, Carl. Then again, I ain’t too studied in lit’rature myself. 🙂

      August 25, 2011 at 11:26 am

  10. hedgewitch

    Interesting decision on form, using the paragraph here–it rather compresses, and for me, hides the impact of the words–all of which were brilliant and apposite, as well as imaginative and thematically right, the last lines in particular. Excellent poem.

    August 24, 2011 at 11:47 am

    • Thanks for the feedback. I was kinda experimenting with the form here– the piece was originally done as a triptych, and I did cut and smush into a single prose paragraph what I thought were the strongest images– maybe that’s why you get the sense of compression. Still a work in progress! 🙂

      August 25, 2011 at 11:30 am

  11. I feel the “bartering for breadcrumbs”

    smooches,
    Larie

    August 24, 2011 at 11:51 am

  12. Anonymous

    Neat. Thanks for a pleasing read.

    August 24, 2011 at 1:32 pm

  13. Much thanks to all for stopping by and leaving your kind & thoughtful words.
    Peace,
    jsl

    August 25, 2011 at 11:33 am

  14. I’m not quite sure what to make of this, except it’s brilliant, I love it, and I was captured and flung on a roller coaster ride through snowdrifts, summer lakes and bath tubs of autumn’s longing.

    August 25, 2011 at 3:05 pm

  15. delicious is right. couldn’t wait to read this twice. i love the beautiful little ornament that is ‘that first time.’ just love that detail in the middle of it all. to me, that just made it come alive.

    August 25, 2011 at 9:06 pm

  16. Beautifully written!

    August 29, 2011 at 1:17 am

  17. This is otherworldly and rooted in the earth at once

    Very different form
    I completely love this writing

    September 1, 2011 at 8:35 pm

  18. Really good work!

    September 4, 2011 at 11:44 pm

  19. Jennie

    I love the richness of these images!

    September 8, 2011 at 3:11 am

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