I.
drops blink past,
iterations
of an early fall; she–
damp smile
waiting
for the sky
to lighten.
II.
puddle-
dipped calves
cross rain-stained
brick bareheaded and
at a run, the road
anything but
yellow.
III.
he
keeps
always
an umbrella
in the glove box,
just in case she (re-)
turns.
Lovely. Part III gave me a delicious sense of painful anticipation. I’m left wondering where she went on the “road anything but yellow” and why he waits.
Thanks, Denise! I like that the piece leaves all these unanswered questions. π
Your image, in photo and writing, is outstanding…..just lovely!
Aw, thanks, Cindy. glad people are liking the (actual) photo. I took it to fit the piece and I’m still not sure I’m crazy about it.
No yellow-brick road this…good write.
finger snap!
smooches,
Larie
Thanks, dear! We need to get you to Richmond again soon π
Loved all three, but the final takes it home for me. Well done!
All three were wonderfully written, but yeah the final does sum it up so well, liked that one the best, very nice!
ha these are all nice but i really like the middle…and the allusion to wizard of oz works nicely…and its raining here too so i can relate…smiles…
brian, glad to know my yellow brick road didn’t get completely lost in the puddles. π
Nice….I really like the third one π
What a beautiful, spare poem. There’s just enough room for the reader to enter and picture his/her own rainy day. Excellent work!
Judiciously phrased. Intriguing. Very nice the way it draws you in and makes you care about both of them….
i like “drops blink past,” and the way you’ve captured the beautiful image of rain-wet bricks “anything but yellow.” and the way he waits with his umbrella – for her…
thanks so much, leslie. always a pleasure to have your comments.
Gorgeous words. I love rain and autumn.
(The photo, somehow, made me think of lasagne.)
!!! uh, thanks? π
welldone — and the photo is just beautiful — thank you for this
No fat on this…lean poetry. Excellent.. // Peter.
Thanks, Peter. appreciate your thoughts, as always.
A piece well written, engaging β good workβ¦ mine is here: http://www.image-verse.com/clown
I love your wordplay here!
I particularly like the hint of loss and hope in the third piece, but all are vivid and thought-provoking. Lovely.
Thanks so much, Jennie π
Unique presentation and catchy.
appreciate everyone’s kind & thoughtful comments. so sorry for the belatedness of the replies– it’s been a hectic coupla days here, but, really, thank you to everyone for stopping by and sharing your insights. so nice to feel that one isn’t writing into a void… π
peace and love to you all,
–jsl
I have some lovely memories with puddles, umbrella and the rain… your poem here sent me right there. Beautiful!
Thanks, Blaga! Always sweet to have a visit from you! π
What a lovely poem!
i love that all three could stand on their own as well…enjoyed your rain story