contrails of cirrus
like kitestrings are flung
cross a June evening,
laundry lines of the summer’s
sirensong, a rumbling
in the stomach of my soul.
it nears storm season,
longing anticipated before
lightning even
touches down.
the wind builds
castles of our discontent, dust
scattered like glitter &
unicorns ‘cross the page where
we grub out with the back
end of a no.2 lead the lust
which would hang
us up to dry. do i
already drip? i cannot
remember how
the next verse goes.
my black marks
are wound like
kitestrings ’round
but a single wrist, tight,
untangled (and i think),
still my own.
the tenth muse 
This is incredible. I love it. My favorites are S1 and S2, as well as these:
“scattered like glitter &
unicorns”
“end of a no.2 lead the lust
which would hang
us up to dry”
“tight,
untangled (and i think),
still my own”
aww, thanks so much, rosemary! i think i like the first 2 stanzas the best, myself. 🙂
Love the use of language here, but having a hard time deciphering any literal (linear) meaning. Just feel a general sense of foreboding, but gathering clouds always have that effect on me. Thanks.
mosk, i’ve always found literal linearity to be overrated. cheers. 🙂
dang…the first 5 lines are just rip with imagery…great joanna…the grubbing out the lust with a no. 2 penci….well that is vivid…smiles….i don not remember how the next verse goes…gives us a chance to breath before the pain…kite strings…dang…
thanks for dropping in, brian. vividness and breathing both very important aspects here. *smiles.*
peace
j
a rumbling in the stomach of my soul….castles of our discontent, dust…..beautiful lines, Joanna. I enjoyed this.
a rumbling in the stomach of my soul ! ! !
didn’t know your soul had a stomach, did you, Carl?
Lovely use of language. The imagery inspired me to write a piece that I’ll share next week.
{Ami}
http://sundrysumthins.wordpress.com/
cool! i definitely wanna come by and check it out– love it when creativity produces a chain reaction 🙂
I would love for you to come see it. I have it up now.
{ami}
http://sundrysumthins.wordpress.com/2012/07/03/love-lines/
Great imagery, and the close is just something special.
Great picture as well.
thanks on both counts, wanderer. 😉
Inspired me too… http://raysharp.wordpress.com/2012/06/29/tea-leaves/