because while some truths lend themselves to equations, others are best described in verse

Remembering Hal and Gail

island sunset with girl

everyone
looks younger
in love.

we haven’t been
there much,
lately. i count

crows
feet around
your coronaries,

the hard-ish wrinkles
over my veins.
we need more red,

re-awakened
part-sun days,
thornless. river-

mud between
our toes, not
rose but rust-gold

long(ing)-
fingered lenses
through which

all the world
seems wetter and
better for it,

like spring,
like summer
in a mirror

in a cabin
on a side street
by the ocean, yes.

everyone
looks younger
in love.

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28 responses

  1. I really enjoyed this poem and the theme of “everyone looks younger in love.”..very true.

    April 2, 2013 at 12:20 pm

    • thanks, sl. it is a curious phenomenon. smiles.

      April 3, 2013 at 8:51 am

  2. this is lovely, still sad, but with a touch of turning a corner, slightly, maybe like a subtle shift of weight on a bicycle or a knee on the steering wheel. I love the colors, the mirror, and the pacing, the lines and triplets

    April 2, 2013 at 12:29 pm

    • thank you, Ray. i hope it is turning a corner indeed

      April 3, 2013 at 8:59 am

  3. Wow…so beautiful Joanna. Made me a bit weepy! I love seeing what you see. Thank you 🙏

    April 2, 2013 at 12:39 pm

    • aww, thank YOU, Eva!

      April 3, 2013 at 9:03 am

  4. smiles…lovely verse joanna…there is a lot of feeling bubbling just under the surface of it…the looking younger in love contrasted with the focus on the crows feet and wrinkles….ouch….

    April 2, 2013 at 12:55 pm

    • hey, thanks, brian. was trying to keep the “ouch” to a minimum. smiles.

      April 3, 2013 at 9:10 am

  5. I love this one, Joanna. I was talking about this general topic last night and couldn’t explain myself, but you’ve nailed it in a poem. Fabulous.

    April 2, 2013 at 3:00 pm

    • thanks, Carl. sounds like a good discussion. glad the piece was timely. 🙂

      April 3, 2013 at 9:21 am

  6. Technique-wise (and consider the ignoramus source), I like the brevity, the economy of each line. Yes, everyone looks younger in love because they’re happy. So how do you explain my weary eyes, the dark circles underneath and the girth flopping over my belt? I’m in love too. I liked this very much, dr poetessa.

    April 2, 2013 at 3:39 pm

    • i’m glad you approve, Sir Mosk. i was especially hoping you’d take note of the more positive tone here. 🙂

      April 3, 2013 at 9:40 am

      • Yes, I liked the positive tone, if I didn’t make that clear. I expect your next poem to include the phrase “Zippity Doo Dah” – if there’s a poet who can do it, it’s YOU! – moskaroo

        April 3, 2013 at 11:59 am

  7. Such lovely images… and it’s true. We do look younger (and lighter) in love… especially at its onset.

    April 2, 2013 at 5:28 pm

    • the goal should be to keep it that way! 🙂 thanks, Laurie.

      April 3, 2013 at 9:46 am

  8. Truth well-spoken… er, written. The secret to looking young is to always be in love! The work involved with that–ay yi yi! But I so love when I see it written on the faces of an old couple, you know they had to fight hard to keep it. I want to be them.

    April 2, 2013 at 6:18 pm

    • You’re so right! We should all aspire to that, I think. *smiles*

      April 3, 2013 at 2:32 pm

  9. Everyone does look younger when they are inlove 🙂 Lovely poem, Joanna.

    April 2, 2013 at 10:28 pm

    • thanks, lady! 🙂

      April 3, 2013 at 2:50 pm

  10. 1emeraldcity

    Love your effective use of color here…a lovely, poignant write 🙂

    April 3, 2013 at 5:38 am

    • thanks, jacquie!

      April 3, 2013 at 2:55 pm

  11. Lovely poem… and it rings so very true…
    Young love, red (as joy?)… old love, literally hardened… I really liked the contrast here.
    Glad that I read this.

    April 3, 2013 at 7:47 pm

    • thanks so much, goldberry! 🙂

      April 4, 2013 at 10:35 am

  12. Just lovely. I love how you used color, short lines, and the “everyone looks younger in love” to begin it and end it. The way the message of the poem seems to be was fitting with that line of “younger in love” as if to say, “let’s go back to an earlier time” where we were “younger” and “more in love” then now.

    April 4, 2013 at 8:46 pm

    • thank you, Lila. i appreciate tremendously your thoughtful comment!

      April 5, 2013 at 9:54 am

  13. Very nice theme… I like the photo, too. Did you take it and process it?

    April 7, 2013 at 10:35 am

    • Hi! Thanks. 🙂 Yes, I took it with a digital cam and then filtered in camera raw/photoshop.

      April 7, 2013 at 11:54 am

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